Corporate voice, begone!

You're back at Verde Solutions. Here's the draft Claude produced:

Subject: Q3 Review Highlights — Verde Solutions.

Dear Leadership Team, I wanted to share a brief recap of our quarterly review outcomes. This quarter the Verde Solutions packaging team achieved two significant milestones: a 12% reduction in production costs and the launch of two new biodegradable product lines. Both reflect our continued commitment to sustainable innovation and operational efficiency. These results position us well heading into Q4, and I look forward to discussing next steps with the team. Best regards, [Your Name]

Good on the facts — but it's over 200 words and reads too formally for this audience. Paste the draft into the prompt box and tell Claude exactly what to fix.